Bully

Yes!!! And where has this voice been skulking? If righteousness were a hammer, you would forge a weapon of sorrow to impale yourself upon before the cringing world. Now, I will add something to your to-do list. Stop using the words immortal and soul, separately or together, for three months. Then, consider well where they are used. They are clichés which are easy, obviating your invention of wording to make them unnecessary. I once said to someone else, if anger is a motivator, then let the anger work. This is a big big step. Here you are working hard. The crutches of rhyme are tossed to the side. You are not so focused on carefully constructing a safe place but rather letting the provocative take and make its own kind of comfort. The comfort of the real. If you remain alive after this poem, as I do expect of you, then remember how you wrote this piece. And the nice thing about such an advancement is that my words are just external acknowledgement. You must know already that you have done something good poetically. Let that self awareness be your guide. As you leave behind the trappings of poetic safety you approach the place of your own voice's power. And it is in knowledge of one's capacity (another word for "value") that this other comfort resides. Congratulations, Caitlin! Brian

hey cat in this write you really set the pen free its one of my fav`s of your and you have had a few gems if righteousness were a hammer you would forge a weapon of sorrow to impale your self upon " wow wow amd wow again that is has to be the best line i have heard in a long while you should stay in that place your in and keep writing there , i feel you have taken another step up with this write loving it ,,,,,ziggy

Bravo and into the light you go my Big Sis voting myself out this one is spitting in their face and saying 'Fuck you' I think I love you lol more ;) love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

And congrates on Spotlight lol ... hope you wake up smiling today ;) love and hugs Jayne x x x

I would have been a bitch and did more, but I also would have sent Edge to give back all that you endured through the years. Piece of, well, you know. I feel he was jealous and he was not a man. I felt angry reading this and a little sad to think anyone could think they were so good they had to hide their own ugliness and cowardice by intimidating someone else. Jerk off. What goes around, time will tell. You are a beautiful woman with a beautiful nature and heart. And hey, I only read your poems, yet this is what I get from you and your poetry. Love ya. Lyz. XX

You did not need lessons nor a teacher. You have gone far beyond my meager abilities. Excellent work. As for whom the poem was written well what goes round comes round Chrys

I believe in karma and if it hasn't caught up yet it will.Great read, I seriously want to kick the shit out of that bully (please excuse the french) ...ZOMBIE

Cat, I left a comment to this one yesterday...but it isn't here anymore! Forgetting the subject matter for a moment, I do like the style/structure of the poem, with short lines running into each other, it gives it a sense of direction. Obviously you need a chorus and a good bridge! LOL! I was going to pick out my favourite stanza, but I can't as it all wraps up into itself as one big stanza, so I can safely say I love it all. As for the subject, well, you certainly let your mind and pen do the walking here. I think I read another comment here about karma...and oh boy he has it coming. Give me his address if you need to. The bigger the bully the harder they fall. You wrote the poem 3 years ago, how long was it after the bully actually stopped his 'bullying'...I only ask because the emotion in your words sound and feel like something you've kept inside for years before releasing it? I like the use of immortal soul btw. All in all this is a personal and powerful piece and I hope it brought you some release from the pain you obviously felt from this fucker! On that note, I must sleep. Simply fantastic piece. Spotlight is deserved. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

And yes I love a vented write. Congrats as well dear Queen, you deserve it. After reading the reply I now feel this guy was not comfortable with his own sexuality but that does not give him the right to judge or criticize any other human, and I know what goes around comes around is true. I have seen it and it has happened to me. An angry little boy. Well there is no fear me going to that site and it is a pity that the likes of one dickhead can ruin it for others. Thanks for this bitching session, cleared the way for another. You talented winter Queen, who has melted the hearts of many here, and you are extremely loved for it and all yours and Edges poetry are of a standard to be proud of as we are of you. Lyz. XX.

This piece angered me, and made me want to hunt this p.o.s. down - even more so when I found it was autobiographical. Pretty powerful writing. I know of a couple clawed kitties that would love to give this person "face hugs" =) ~Jess K. ----------------------- "There was no promise made, the part you played, the chance you took. There's no way out of here, when you come in you're in for good." - David Gilmour

I don't want to get caught up in this vendetta stuff and draw you away from the acclaim and "spotlight" of this well deserving piece. Whatever the fodder was/is - it is an excellent depiction of a modern day "sociopath" (they are no longer termed Psychopaths - although the tag still sticks!) To get into the mind of the 'wounded narcissist/psychopath' you have so well touched on the latent self loathing here: You claim your heart/is a tongueless beast/that should be/torn from your body/BECAUSE IT CANNOT PLEASE YOU! and VOILA! there it is!!! Bravo! A well-deserved spotlight! Bonita j ps. You bring out the psychologist in me every time! lol ;)

Kudos on Spotlight, dear Lady, and well-deserved at that! Very powerful piece of poetry with all the necessary ingredients to make it so! I envy your ability and am thrilled to have you as a friend on this site! Chrys sends her love!

We have all been hurt but we don't have to empathise with or forgive the unrepentant perpetrator. You voice is excellent, your verse superb, your sentiment sickens me. Tell me I am wrong Aeron

Oh My Dear Cat... If I could wander freely in your mind right now and pluck the essence of thought, collate your imagination and bottle the volcanic soul that lurks within those stimuli and neuron capacators I would be a very happy man right now! I am currently writing a trilogy of poems and one of them has such a similar feel that I think you pinched my notes in my sleep lol! This is such a powerful write that strikes home with vehemace and fevour all that it cries and bemoans... brilliant literature and wordplay captived me instantly I was dragged to hell in visions of rage and self-pity... also like a preying demon ready to devour the souls of the wicked. The way you portray your own self-doubt and mind preying is rather heart felt, in contrasting comparison to the venom tongued monster. Simply superb writing! Now go and kick his butt... the great big git that he is! Tell him Cat the writer rules supreme! Yeah! Dale :)

anger, held at such intensity, is a purifying fire. it transcends the bully who afflicts you. the staccato flow of words and images, like reflections from a broken mirror, is like a Cubist painting. impressive.

Brilliant, brilliant writing... so absolutely targeted with skill & smoothness like a beautiful riverstone gracefully making it's way to the bottom of a deep quiet body of water as the suns rays played diagonally... you illuminate this story as it sinks to the hearts of readers, it could NOT miss. Cat it is so good to read such strong & skillful works from you again, I have missed you. Thank you for freeing this so we could be so inspired Cheers Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama