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MUTED LARK

Hanging on to the end
of a noose its not a
neck but a head that`s
stretched knowing it
would settle for any
unflattering truce .

rhythm tossed desire
shattered , no real
wrong deflected
synapses battered

what mattered still
longed for but severely
whittling away
pupils ablaze
frozen then glazed.

amazed at how promise
whip lashed settled ethos

muzzled by society`s splintered
interest, disemboweled by
invading greed for one`s
meager needs .

inner space lost in infinitely
waining fatalism

once enraptured
ensnared by enthusiasm

enticed , used then muted
by a solitary voice.

(dedicated to hooded stranger)

— ziggy, Nov 29, 2009

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Critiques

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Profoundly Deep

Well my oh my you are on a roll and I found this to be a great read. Good for you and I know Dan would appreciate this tribute. Well written and nice to see you excelling. Love Lyz. XX

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi lyz

ah thank you my dear dan was first to read , i wrote this in about five minutes after a few sat night beers lol, and i was surprised at how it came out , but these rants come a little to easy , thanks for your continued surport ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Holy Shit Ziggy … when you

Holy Shit Ziggy ... when you rant you rant dont you hun , I loved it am seeing another side of you? but I still love it lol ... nothing like letting off steam, maybe I should have a rant ? havent had one for a while lol love Jayne x x

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

muted lark

lol, hello there yes there is nothing like a good rant set the pen free , its just a change of topic as i don`t like rewitting on the same topic twice , so will i be seeing a good rant from your self shortly look farward to it cheers jayne ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

hello Ziggy

I miss Dan very much. He always had something useful to say about our poems and lyrics. He is still a good friend. I am hoping my hardest that he will return to us. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

muted lark

hello cat thank you so much this of course is not at all about dan but i agree he is missed and those folk here that are behind his reason for not posting or being here have alot to answer for ,,,,,,,ziggy

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Hey Ziggy

You are so right about that! By the way... Congratulations on making spotlight! Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

muted lark

lol spot yes , i just noticed seldom is wonderful cheers cat ...zigs

bjp

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Ziggy,

I am particularly inchanted with the first stanza. It is brilliant! The poem is high minded and I am sure Dan would be touched. Brian

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

muted lark

hi there brian thank you so much infact i really struggled to know if i should leave the first stanza as is but i am now glad i did i was thinking it might give the wrong impression thanks again i just posted another ,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

You’re a good man Zigs.

You're a good man Zigs. Keep writing. Keep ranting. Keep drinking beer (in moderation). And thanks for that dedication to Dan. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

ahhhhhhhhhh

ah thank you so much thats not the reaction i expected from an angry rant lol, dan was the first to read this cheers ,,,,,zigs

adjei agyei-baah

16 years 6 months ago

made ma day

That was a beautiful piece.You actually made my day with it.Will be eager to read more from you.

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

muted lark

well hello there nice to see a new face looking at my words when a poem has made someone`s day it has it`s job done thank you so much that just made mine cheers ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

Lunegirl

16 years 6 months ago

I thought this was

I thought this was brilliant, i am new on this site, so know not what inspired such a peice, but its really good. vix

Lunegirl

16 years 6 months ago

I thought this was

I thought this was brilliant, i am new on this site, so know not what inspired such a peice, but its really good. vix

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

muted lark

hello there ,the theme behind this is quite simple but the feeling it curns up can go in any direction i want , this is one i have wanted to write for a while so when it stated to come to me it did not take long thanks for the comments and vote ill stop by your page soon ,,,,,ziggy

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