Let me be the one who blocks out the sun

I read this and hello my name is Ms Mona. I never read any of your poems or writes so here I am on your page. I did like this however and wanted to tell you I so love the sun and can feel you when you say you want to block the sun. The sun to me is warmth, love, and light and sometimes a deep dark tan. I just would like to phrase from an old song, Dont let the sun go down on me by our great Elton John an old song from my high school days that still rings true inside me. Love to see more of your work Magics02

your welcome and you can count on me to help you through this if you so should need me I am here for you. You just keep writing my friend and get it out the best way only you can. It will help tremendously. Ms Mona

your poem does indeed block out the sun. How about arranging the lines a little more poetry-stylish? Let me be the one who blocks out the sun…… When the thoughts of intense hate and gut rage meet, you better run, I’ll be 20 feet tall, and over you. one step advancing me further than you’ll ever go in your life, you go in circles, and I … walk the winding path I have come to call life, so enjoy your gerbil ball. I’ll be reluctant to cross paths, you can cry if you want, it does you no good, I’ve brushed your tears off my shoulder, the next one will hit the ground and you can sit there alone and think about the shoulder that was once there. My wall? … impenetrable, it has to be lowered, you can’t ninja past it, your attempts to try only lead to failure. My walk, my stride, my heart. they leave with me. you can’t attain, you earn. that never seemed to surface for you, I doubt it ever will. the ability to change hasn’t quite crossed with you either. hope for the best, you can leave to the shallowness I’d expect. Send your crys seaward for the only things that want to hear them are things which don’t understand what they mean. Ignorance, it flows with you, it's your aura, you are consumed by the inability to think for anyone but yourself. The above are, of course, merely suggestions, yours to take or to leave. Yours, ~Nina aka Ink Dragon

hey buddy! Good job on your poem. For me it is a overwhelming write with powerful emotions oozing from the screen . . Your soul is filled with these great writings. So I encourage you to keep writing. Yours truly, Aireal Steed