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his song, caught in my throat

I was the sky
once,
people looked up to me
for direction and prognostication
of the elements
I held stars, I held snowflakes
I held music
I was dark and mysterious
I glowed in the aftermath of
countless civilizations

I was slowly becoming Death,
drowning in the Seven Seas
and the world wanted to own me
to fly inside my effervescence
to drink my saturation,
to fit into a shroud, a haze,
a gathering storm
of untold magnitude;
upheavals
of lava, pumice and stone
a Rock of Gibraltar
I stood still,
the Pillars of Hercules
making way

now,
for the sparrow I am

his song
caught in my throat
like an apple core.


— Kailashana, Jan 10, 2010

Critiques

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Dezein Graham

16 years 5 months ago

I am going to scan a drawing

I am going to scan a drawing from a 15 years ago I would like you to see. After I reread this piece and the comments, I began to understand more fully what it is about.. Your poem immediately reminded me of this drawing. I'll PM you a link..
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

What a surreal creation, yet

What a surreal creation, yet it is mysteriously credible, the homely sparrow used as the vessel of knowledge caught in your throat, is stunningly uncomfortable and therefore spellbinding. This is great and powerful too. Anna you do it and do it and do it again, spellbind us with your words and twisting our viewpoints like those in a kaleidoscope ever changing your patterns of words so magically. Dear sister Anna from Ann.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

Surreal is what’s going to

Surreal is what's going to happen to this beautiful world of ours, if we don't learn to speak out against the harm we do, against one another here, there and everywhere. Love, my dear sister, is the only thing that will save us from ourselves. ~Anna
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Well this is great

Such strength in these words. Wonderfully written, and some may affiliate with this. A gem of a poem. A pleasure. Love Lyz, XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Mum

I choke on the core ... an amazing poem from an even more amazing woman love and hugs Jayne x x
arja

arja

16 years 5 months ago

well crafted words, the

well crafted words, the emotion is somewhere in between the phases of nature, i just love the feeling...wonderful work!

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