Tortured Soul (Formerly Untitled (open for suggestions))

It's the ending that clinched this poem... Title: *No Escape?* ~Anna

Embracing Fear This poem reaches out to me of someone who has experienced a terrible fear, but has learned to live with it regardless. Hence the title suggestion. xena465

How about, tortured comfort ?

I see eaisily "Fear" is the topic for me, it seems to me to be self inflicted, but whose arms are doing the holding? untitled just doesn't work or do justice to this work of your's so only you know how to propperly give it It's direction and clarifing meaning. We will have to wait to your Muse hints to you it's reveal I can't wait to see the curtain fall the anticipation is relentless I fell so trap in the abyss waiting in limbo for your flight of indecision, it must come to a end soon please give this work a title Donnie/Sinbad then I can give it another star Second to last stanza last line {it} should it be [its] ? no yes Your throat begings to close May might concider losing *your* and make throat plural to aide {its} if that is what you intended Donnie/Sinbad

Because of your stament at the end of your poem I personaly would make it personal and claim the tortured soul and make it my own. from the title on down, {My} or The or A or even maybe I,the Tortured Soul but tortured soul it for me now and maybe for me only! It seems to need something to personlize it to the poem because of the last statment made. How can you show *me* the way Unless ect. ect. Intertwined with *the*[long]fingers. maybe Change to a verb [longing] fingers. and lose *the* Intertwined with longing fingers Of Terror no coma Around *you* maybe to {yours}, ours, or Mine +? "neck" or neck's Causing Shadows to *line break* Even take a step back I hope I haven't over helped or sugested I am sure you will do fine if not great with what you are doing with this write it is a good piece and I know whatever you do with it will be outstanding Donnie/Sinbad

Hi Debbi, So I hope this is just out of the fear closet. But on to the peice. I desperatly tried to be helpful and find a suggestion, but I loved the body of the work. I am left trying to add suggestions for the title. So here are a few out of my title closet. JK. I really loved the read. Feared choice. Yesterdays fear Abysmal fear Abysmal trappings, I could come up with more, let me know what your thinking towards if you still want suggestions. Julie D.D.

how about "Shadows step back"? Causing even The Shadows to take a step back. great lines, Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

tortured comfort or my body is a tortured soul

I like the Idea of personlizing in this poem as I said this title sugestion would require little if any change to the content as it flows now in my opinion but hey they are like potatoe chips ya can't stop at just one and Jess is corect to say "Causing even the Shadows to take a step back." is great content I myself use long descriptions often, too often maybe? That is why I offered the short version Causing Shadows to Even take a step back A way I use to break up the lenght and keep the same meaning or a meaning close to the original Donnie/Sinbad

i really like this concept and the way it was written. ur an amazing writer. -ur friend brighteyed