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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Feb 18, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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The dialogue of silenceresembles theatre of the absurdHe's waiting for GodotShe hasn't uttered a word He speaks with disdainhis body language concursshe turns away trembing"communication"is just another word. The wanton isolationof not being heard, the mirror shattered,the key  left unturned. Pitious dreams smothered -  longings, those unspoken truths
  now hidden from view 
cowering and covered. They loved each other oncebefore they recognised the abyss,they touched the void,then their minds became rabid.Anxiety and anguish are all that remainthe co-joined twins of those -once starkly sane" BjR Feb. 19, '10
— Bonitaj, Feb 18, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

….before they touched the

....before they touched the void..... Boni, a truly remarkable poem, an Aha moment! One everyone should know like their own face. ~A
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

Oh Kal!

I actually think it's a case of "We're both out to a lettuce leaf lunch" ;) Love the way you elaborate on a poem by writing a new poem! See if there is more closure in this one now that I've done a re-write! Thanks for stopping by! Boni
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

Gee thanks Kal!

Interesting how you see it in a new medium - i.e. visual, the movies. I don't frequent those too often so I'm glad if I was able to capture that somehow! Thanks for you critiques - they are always so valuable! Boni
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bjp

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Bonita,

I think that this is a very good start to a longer piece. Please consider going on. Brian
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Ann of NorwayOh I agree with

Ann of Norway Oh I agree with Brian, yes its full of promise and well put, your absurd theatre could developed in more of the same. Great stuff here Bonni, love Ann
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Orphani

16 years 3 months ago

I loved the imagery in this

I loved the imagery in this in the first and last stanzas although it had a ridgid feel for me in the structure and rhyme. Regardless of that which is my personal preferance i thought it an outstanding work of art. Well done Bonnie Bon. B

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