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Eye Hope

Last night I had a dream, of sorts
through a "haze", so  blindly obscure,
that I could've been asleep, and dreaming that I was...awake !

With that point blurred, what next occurred was really something,
for it was akin to a right-cross,
because it turned my head, so quickly !

I spied a long way off, in the distance
an army of homeless citizens,
clamoring over each other, for spare change...and something good to eat;

while simultaneously, shipping off to war !
What kind of soldier can the homeless live to be ?
What kind of veteran will they make, as well ?

Only time can answer such a riddle,
and, only time possesses such patience,
so, as not to draw attention, to their eyes.

For, they shield us from knowing, of their guiltier motives,
and, all that we can see is, their sincerest hopes and dreams,
That...plus the distant, understanding nature of a child, in their "wake";

and so, I am reminded to be aware, even of my own expressions,
and to not, confuse...passer bye's in life, with just my gaze,
especially, when both of my eyes are, closed...wide shut. 
— docmaverick, Mar 06, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I loved this one Doc … you

I loved this one Doc ... you got a couple of typos ... 5th stanza 'Answer/e' 6th stanza 'the/ir' felt like an abstract dream if thats possible love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 3 months ago

Thank-you, J.C.....

...for the corrections. I did change them, so as not to be obstreperous. I appreciate your candor, in your critiques. If it were'nt for you, my Mom, and kailashana...I'd be out of luck. So, thanks...again. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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Antoinette Mar…

16 years 3 months ago

And of course....here comes your Mom ....

What a question you have raised in my mind...what kind of soldier would the homeless be? I would have to think a very good one, after being fed, clothed and a nice warm place to lie their heads...yet deep inside an anger....raised in the right direction....and what kind of veteran?? an absolute perfect....have you ever met a homeless person without an interesting tale to tell??? excellent thought provoking write....my son...I Love it. Antoinette Mari
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 3 months ago

Thanx, Mom....

...Yours, is a voice poets should keep as, serious ! All seriousness aside....all poets should listen to your critiques ! I now, deem it so ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 3 months ago

now this I like

feels like you are talking to me personally. The exclamation marks are un-necessary and one too many questions. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

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