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Wafi
Mar 10, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Pashtun Blood

Blood of Pashtuns
Like water
Flows
In streams of peace...
To water
The crop of Terrorism!

The bride of peace
Sitting
On the bank of the blood stream,
Dips her finger in it
And with blood ink,
Writes their lament
On her white skirt--
Torn by those
Who claim
To arrange
Her wedding!

So much is left
To suffer....

— Wafi, Mar 10, 2010
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

My Dear Wafi

This sad poem is no less than brilliant. My favorite lines: The bride of peace Sitting On the bank of the blood stream, Dips her finger in it And with blood ink, Writes their lament On her white skirt– Torned by those Who claim To arrange Her wedding! Your message is loud and clear in graceful words. Just one suggestion: change "torned" to torn Always, Cat
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Cat

Thank you Cat, for taking the time to read and comment. So glad to hear from you. Thanks for "torn" ;) Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

hello again

I came back to reread and nominate this fantastic poem for spotlight. Always, Cat
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Oh, My Sincere Thanks, Dearest Cat

My sincere Thanks, dearest Cat. So grateful to you for your generous appreciation of this poem. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Kal

Thank you Kal, for taking the time to read and comment. You are so true, my friend, and I appreciate your honesty. Like your new photo :) Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Wafi

A prayer roll in the skirt of a bridal dress thats what you made me think of and the cheery on the top is you posting a newie welcome back again Wafi you have been missed love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Jayne

Thank you Jayne, my so loving friend. I appreciate your thoughts. Liked your words "A prayer roll in the skirt of a bridal dress". Trust me Jayne, words are in love with you! They feel grateful when you use them so beautifully! Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

What a beautiful thing to

What a beautiful thing to say (((hugs))) thank you Wafi smiles for miles my friend its always good to see you around love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

a people used

thoought provoking write wafi thank you for giving me your insight into this horror. judy
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Judy

Thank you Judy, for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your thoughts. Looking forward to reading your work. Sincerely, Wafi ~So much is left to suffer~
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

A strong deep write

Powerful subject Writes their lament On her white skirt– Torn by those Who claim To arrange Her wedding! The fact that she writes their lament and not her own is so very strong a point. It stopped me in my track and spun a whole different feel to the poem. Beautiful Wafi Seabhac
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Seabhac

Thank you dear Seabhac, for taking the time to read and comment. Thanks for mentioning the point on lament. I appreciate your thoughts on this. Sincerely, Wafi ~So much is left to suffer~
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Wafi,

this is, without a doubt, one of your best poems to date. Like some of the other commenters, I was particularly drawn to and moved by the second stanza. What can one do from this faraway place? I can only offer my thoughts and prayers. Yours, ~Nina
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lyz

16 years 3 months ago

Oh Wafi

How can I add to the above comments. You bring us to our knees. Written without fault, just brilliant. Sad. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Liz

Thank you Liz, my loving friend. I appreciate your thoughts. Where had you been? Had missed you. Hope everyone is fine. How is the baby doing? Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

All Well

I miss everyone too and I am glad u are back posting. Babe doing soooo well and nearly here. 11th or 12th June. I reckon the end of May but who knows, so long as he/she is fine. Love to you and your family, Lyz, take care. XX
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

That's A Great News

That's a great news, dear Lyz. Hope he/she will have a safe and happy landing, lol. Thanks a lot for reading and commenting. I have missed you and your lovely work. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks again

and yes it is great news. Thank u. Love to all. Lyz. XX
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Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Rosina

Thank you Rosina, for reading and commenting. So glad you like it. I appreciate your thoughts. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Thank You So Much Bill

Thank you so much Bill, for reading and commenting. So glad you like it :) Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Dalton

16 years 2 months ago

Wafi as always you are an

Wafi as always you are an inspiration to us all. you paint pictures with words which is the heighth of our art. Respect John X...
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You So Much Dear John

Thank you so much dear John, for taking the time to read and comment. I always appreciate your great comments that fill my heart with gratitude and love. So glad you like my work. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

My Pleasure Dear John :)

My pleasure dear John :) Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 1 month ago

Wafi...

It is good to see you with your pen glowing, I thank you for sharing with us the plight of the Pashtun People, many in the world have no idea how deeply it goes. I thank you for your bravery, I often think you may rub the wrong person with your poetry, I can only hope that doesn't ever happen. and with the blood ink... I would change "blood" as it is already covered as to it being "blood"... there are many words that would fit there... just a suggestion Wafi, very powerful poetry, the image will stay with me for a long time... thank you again!
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You Dear Richard

Thank you dear Richard, for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your great thoughts. Thinking to work on your suggestion. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

Glad To See You

Glad to see you, Greeneyes. Thanks a lot for taking the time to read and comment. Sincerely. Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

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