waiting for Godot to leave

Waiting.

It’s taken an eternity for
you to walk into my life.

And now I’m filled with
what if’s.
What if we’re already lost?
Just paths that crossed.

As if there were hope.
As if there is a way out,
unqualified for love.

Hey, brother, got a dime to spare?

— Kailashana, Mar 21, 2010

Critiques

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Mum

What if its better than imagination ? I am seeing something I havent seen in you before ...a letting down of your guard ... raw emotion in pulling this poem out I bow love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Lol. And all these pages of

Lol. And all these pages of poems, were not? Aiiiiiiii! Love, Mum Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

PMSL .. they were all raw

PMSL .. they were all raw but this ones fresh raw yanno and the expectation for me is much higher and real lol ;) with hope love and hugs and smiles aiiiiiiiii Jayne-Chloe

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Time will tell. Dead man

Time will tell. Dead man tell no tales. Now wtf did I just write that? Oh, because. I don't know when to shut up. ;-) ~A Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Is reality all that is imagined?

Ann of Norway Or is all that is imagined, reality? Oh you spin your heart like a coin in the air, will it, won't it land on the fair side of right or the dark side of wrong and your song finishes the thought with its sound ringing like the landing of the coin on the ground singing on. Oh sun and moon you come and go, as we do too, I wish, I wish, I wish it so and so do you. Ann your loving sister Ann my Anna. Qualified a thousand fold for love.

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Well… Deep

Well... Deep subject. Love, Sis Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Take your pick, Troy.

Take your pick, Troy. You'd be right. ~A Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Anna

I am with Seren on this. Different. I am used to reading your poems that have so much energy and knowing, this is a wonderful piece, yes, a little doubt seems to be lingering in these words when I read though. I see you staring out the window, your mind doing overtime. Things will fall into place, I am sure, but nought has phased you from producing another wonderful poem. Your words always get us thinking, lol. Love your new pic, is it an Arum Lily? Catch up soon, take care. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

Mariposa

16 years 2 months ago

Very expressive poem

I love how you don't say a lot but say so much. so many questions your poem brings up...and Seren is right, we do see something of you, uniquely you, that we haven't seen before...and it is wonderful! Why the reference to Godot? xoxo Jhena

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