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PASSIVE SILENCE FOR A SHIELD

I am a mediocre poet
It must be true
the god of words
has divined it so
       -let's assume he's male this god

And do we care if
passive silence
is now a shield
from cruel barbs
that pass for
intellectual superiority?

I am a mediocre mother
It must be true
the god of caring
has divined it so
       -let's assume she's female this god

And let's be clear-'mediocre'
is intended to insult

I am a mediocre human
It must be true
the god-my god
has divined it so
        -let's assume it's asexual this god

So make peace
with
poet, child, god
And find
a voice
a strength
a way
on your journey
to truth
— panaella, Apr 06, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear P

call to arms in poetry ... well done take a bow lovely this write deserves it, I seriously thought it was perfect I wouldnt change a thing I cannot express that enough love JayCee
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panaella

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you JC

Your comments cheered me up no end. Never be as good as you though...so I wont try...just doing my own thing even if some on here don't get it. Luv Ells x
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panaella

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Mr Crud

I respect you and Seren a great deal...and if you critique you tell me why...which helps me develop. Thank you. Mrs Crud xxx
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I love the format and the

I love the format and the meaning in this lovely poem Panaella. Just one thing I noticed, a wee typo... {assexual} (asexual) Rosina xena465
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panaella

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Rosina

ooops... I'm awful at checking my spelling!...thanks for the comments luv Ellie x
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panaella

16 years 2 months ago

thank you

I really appreciate this comment...it was a response to something someone said to me. Revenge is a dish set to poetry! Ells x

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