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suspended animation

Translation: I was stting on my "behind", but I really wanted to do something else at the time ;)....

 suspended animation In the nooks and cranniespsychic crevices of mentalvacuumoctuplets of digits pound awayas the raga unwinds on its coursedown an emerald pathfringed by lianas of purplesticky heat clings desperately toone's visualacuitymisconstruingreinterpretingthe fata morgana is itoscillatestantalizingly on a par withpremium writhings ofharem queensequipped with shimmering drachmassigns of fidelity ortemptationas the eternal drums drone onpersuasivesilky percussioninterspliced with sitar harmoniesand effortless manipulationof the physical formin comeliness and callousedutterly spentmonstrousgrotesques as well as Persianpatterns of life and reverencewoven into animate fabric as itcrystalizescondenses itself lithely into adiamantinegrain a speck barelyintelligiblelegibly discernibleyet so intensely vibrant and endowed with warmth and lifethat it may be submerged in lilacwaterlogged subterranean chasmsbut its echo would not diminish in itsintensityeven in deathas it rotates in agonizing suspensionortranquil equilibriumspintumblecalmcore.
— Shango007, Apr 09, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Shango

I think if you tweaked the format of this one It would read a little smoother other than that lol I loved it :) love JayCee
Shango007

Shango007

16 years 2 months ago

I always appreciate your

I always appreciate your input.. looking back over the piece, I did notice that some of the line breaks seem kinda jagged. Maybe I can combine some of the shorter lines to get a better flow.... Thank you ;)
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swa

16 years 1 month ago

wow.suspended animation is a

wow.suspended animation is a magical journey.its fun in a serious way.what others may call serious play.never stop writing.i think its awesome
Shango007

Shango007

16 years 1 month ago

I was heavily caffeeinated

I was heavily caffeeinated when I wrote this piece, so half the magic could be purchased at Starbucks, if you think about it ;). Thank you.
arja

arja

16 years 1 month ago

}}}clap - clap - clap{{{

}}}clap - clap - clap{{{ Bravo! ..this is the first poem that I've read today and from you, and it says a lot.. love it!

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