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On a Winter Beach

The waves crashed and pounded like motorway pile ups, so my partner on this winter walk thought. I shouted to him what do you want,!  his ears rattled and his head shook as if shocked by gunfire,
his face was screwed up like old newspaper , he looked confused, his face went calm, then he said good bye walked away-I
turned away and walked in the opposite direction , I had run after him too many times before. This is where I wanted to be.

— pinksheep, Apr 11, 2010

Critiques

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pinksheep

16 years 2 months ago

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will try to make this sound less Mills and Boon on a re-write
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pinksheep

16 years 2 months ago

Oh

i writing this out though i have never been on a winter beach like this have now understood the narrators partners psyche , the narrator is simply she feels looking for atmosphere, her partner realises that they will be swept out to sea and become 2 fatalities .

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