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No Prayer to the Moon in the Unborn Childs Room

In the nursery are small wooden boxes painted with green horses the colour of  leaves. I sit on a  soft  floor cushion
embroidered with rowan berry red twigs and petals, and stare vacantly at the pregnant full moon that is white with fear. If
only I could worship that moon that stares back at me afraid like an office clerk that files paper, as if it were precious specimens
behind glass, the boxed  corpes of lepidoptera.
— pinksheep, Apr 11, 2010

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pinksheep

16 years 2 months ago

Great

review Eph love your 'poem', i pink d'ont know wot you 'ave written, is it a limerick? LOVE IT-this flash fiction of me own goin to 'ave a re-write as a poem one fine day- Should i be callin it Unprayer to the moon-go on i jest- Blah Blah Blah Blah Blacksheep-YOUR REVIEW GREAT.

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