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the distance to the door

In these vague unkempt days
wandering between sunsets
and remote longings
of late unsatisfied yesterdays.

I thought I caught a glimpse
of you laughing, flying unexpected
between lines
by Mikhail Bulgakov.

In the jacket that you gave me
at eighteen below zero
my scalp tightening on my skull,
I find your scent still lingers
in its folds.

Within my landscape of rooms
with its autumn litterings of books,
where my clothes lie
topographic, like islands
contoured on a floor,
I measure only
the distance to your door.
— Craig Norris, Apr 23, 2010

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Country/Region: AUS

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WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Craig!

Hi Craig! This an intriguing write indeed with simile and metaphor taking a key grasp in expressing your raw emotions and thoughts. You seem to be reminiscing and yet haunting yourself with those memories, somehow clinging with remote hope and realisation. I am unsure if seem to be wanting to leave it behind and walk away or if you looking at a rocky road before an escape here lol! A very cleverly constructed write that holds some deep soul note and emotional ties that keep you gripped until the delivery the final title line. Very compelling! And I love the Russian writer you have used here! Dale :)
CN

Craig Norris

16 years 1 month ago

dear Dale

happy that you caught this one, yes Bulgakov is one of Russia's great treasures, love The Master and Margarita, was totally blown away when I finally got to read this masterpiece. You promted me to clarify a couple of things with this poem, so thanks and thanks again. cheers Craig
loved

loved

16 years ago

the distance

The door...is all in ones mind When u want to come over They say the door of opportunity Is wide open today As twas yesterday Come right away loved and lovely

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