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panaella
Apr 29, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

ARID

My femininity is wasting away
every year
I'm withering inside like a
neglected cactus

I need these elements-
affection
comfort
loyalty
My cactus only needs water

I've absorbed toxic rain
it's rotting my roots
I need clean fresh moisture
So, where's my oasis?

All is arid
dry
dessicated
I yearn for irrigation
to be sprinkled and refreshed

My late blooms can still be
magnificent
spectacular
valiant
— panaella, Apr 29, 2010

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panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Thanx

Your so sweet with your comments licia...I like your work too...really classy. Ells x
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Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Ells

Not late this time ... loved the use of Arrid :) brilliant write poetess ;) love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")
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panaella

16 years 1 month ago

I had a typo with arrid...

Hi JC, Typo's the thing with me....always time poor and rushing stuff...not in the same league as your good organisational skills...still, I was pleased with this write...it's flowing better...I'm starting to get the hang of this malarky...well...maybe in about a decade!....lol How you feeling sister?...better than last week? Luv Ells x
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panaella

16 years 1 month ago

I'm a 'prickly pear-shape'....

Hiya Mr Crud, My cactus is dying of neglect... Want to water it soon? (smirk)...can't take you seriously hubby... xxxMrs Cxxx
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Reakky liked the flow of this one

Pan I like the imagery also, your splendid words to fall upon at the end of this long day and tomorrow being Friday Yippe Yia. Good write girl Grazzi xoxox Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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ngaioBeck

16 years 1 month ago

Arid

I suspect there is much,(double entendre),that is lost on me but still I find this to be a clever allegorical piece.
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panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Partly right...

Allegory is a useful tool for observing the human condition... Glad you found it to be clever...coming from a razor sharp talent like you...I'll take it as a compliment. Much is lost on you...you're hopeless at reading between the lines! But then you are a man...enough said! Ells x

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