panaella

May 08, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

MATCHING COLOUR CHARTS

Sharing anecdotes over dry stone walls in our heads
we realise the common patch as we approach the bed

This tipping point in our liaison
means we can start to reason
the meaning of this event

Wind back the reel
How does it make you feel?
Scroll through the texts
What will come next?
Rework the footage
Are we young of age?
Analyse the commentry
Is this serendipity?

A spark developing glows
a glow developing flow
of smoke from friction
friction rushes passion

My eyes compliment yours on our
shared colour charts of life- fixes
we dont clash-
not for us a mess of jarring mixes
but just a dash
of spice
to even up the concoction
of our connubial connection

— panaella, May 08, 2010

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Love it!

Im giving you five! goodness i have seen alot of your work, but your so good a simple nice doesnt cut it, and im not really poet! well done kid, and just to say im not old but i hate cell phones women would do better without them,so would men! their would be less singles in the world! lots of love my eggy friend! shirley harrison

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Thanx

Hiya Shirley! Really appreciate that...hahaha...oh fancy egg and chips now!..grrrrr Luv Ells x

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Hey Pan

Poem is great but somehow the last two lines didn't bring it home for me, maybe I will have to revisit it again. It just seemed out of place for some reason, OOps I see you didnt ask for comments sorry, let me know gal Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

I think you're right Mona

Going to edit...the last two lines were troubling me too...cheers! Ells x

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks

You know I am never too sure if some authors want the comments so I try to ask first and then when I read it out loud then that is where it stumped me. You being and English teacher I know you will fit something there to make it as special as the poem is. I hope you have a wonderful Mother's Day and tell the kids to make you breakfast. Now I wonder if my son will do that for me. Love,Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

thanks mona

Awww mona...ta very much. Mother's Day in UK is in March...so I've already been spoilt for a day!...hahahha Luv Ells x

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ells

Its always the ones who dont think they have it that do ... Ells your a poetess and anyone tells you differently? you send them my way i will so straighten them out ... or knock them out lol ... ;) dont know if you are a mum but happy mothers day if you are , its already halfway over here thanks for sharing all you guys are blowing my mind today lol love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Awww JC

Thank you very much. I must admit, of late had a bit of wobble with doing this...thought I wasn't up to it...but I've decided to not go with the herd to court popularity...I'm an autobiographical poet...It's where I really find my voice....some subjects that I'm interested in I can find my voice through those as well...and I like creating waves with subjects that we dont always talk about! (THE RENEGADE IN ME!) Luv Ya! Ells x

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Superb Ells

I really love this stanza...it steps right into the heart of your words...FAB Wind back the reel How does it make you feel? Scroll through the texts What will come next? Rework the footage Are we young of age? Analyse the commentry Is this serendipity? Rosina xena465

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Rosie

It's a modern dilemma of communication isn't it? I'm single and I date...and being middle-aged it's a minefield of ettiquette and technology! We email...text...chat on the phone...get very 'close' intellectually before we meet. There is usually a reality lag when you meet for the first time! It's all a bit arse about tits from years ago... very confusing, but fun as well! Luv Ells x

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Too right Ells

Now i'm having an affair with you guys but all this technology i just hate really Cell phones indstead of hugging someone at xmas my friends hold tight to there mobiles waiting for texts i hate it i very rarely use my one! like having a first date and he brings his mobile phone on the table i would walk away. i agree totally with you guys and thanks for the oppotunity to have a moan! comunicating through phones ah life just isnt what it was! shirley harrison

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

beautifully written, fun and smart.

What more can we ask? and hey! if everyone else who commented liked your poem as much as they said, why didn't they nominate to spotlight too? I never trust people who are too nice. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Lol. Or ones that sing high

Lol. Or ones that sing high praises and then it disappears from the spotlight because after 70 views, only the original 3 votes kept it there. Can't figure folks out, most of the time. O, about your poem, Pan...once you're in bed with the one you love, braille takes over, and every colour variation on the theme of lights spark inside, eh? ~A "If you think you're free, there's no escape possible." ~ Ram Dass

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

so right ellie

todays technology is amazing - and the kids take it all for granted. i know so many people who have met and fallen in love electronically long before they met in the flesh (no pun intended, but take it as one if you like) love judy xxx

Join Neopoet to leave a critique

Neopoet is a free community of poets who critique and support each other's writing.

Join free Log in