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ShePra
May 10, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Girl Was I

Girl was I

Happy in my house

Every corner known to eye

Every nook to the sky

 

Sun in my grass

Was always so bright

& moon in my window

Used to sleep with me all night

 

Every alley leads to my room

Every voice asks me

Every word was so sweet

& every eye full with love.

 

The flowers knew me

Known was I to every fly

Every leaf used to talk

Every wasp listens

 

One day wind was so high

All I could hear was

Somebody saying

Pack your bags & fly

 

Obeyed I

Filled my basket

With the flowers

Dust

Sand

and with little water that still flows from that tap.

 

Found myself with all the chains & shackle

That could glitter 

With any ray of light

Welcomed me some unknown & known’s



But something in me

Was scared

Scared to every eye

Scared to every desire

 

Somebody asked me

What have I brought?

I opened the basket

& heard the laughs...

 

Who on earth brings things like that....

With numb voice I replied

Flowers are for your house... to make it bright

Sand is to fill every splinter

& water to wash

Wash my hands with the dust of my past......

 

— ShePra, May 10, 2010

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shane

16 years 1 month ago

Beautiful and Brilliant

I love it! The melody, the words and the theme are wonderful. It reminds me of when I left home. It's beautiful.
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ShePra

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Shane, Somebody

Dear Shane, Somebody has truly said feelings have no language or colour..., thank you for your appreciations. Love..
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ShePra

16 years 1 month ago

Dear, This is a reaction

Dear, This is a reaction of mixed feeling; it’s amazing to go through it. I will remember your advice. Thank you. Love..
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

And set out on a new life as a wife? Dear Sheba.

Ann of Norway "Every leaf use to talk".............useD "Used to sleep with me whole night".....whole = all "Only I could hear was"....All I could hear... "& with little water that still flows from that tap."...and with the little water flowing from that tap? "Welcomed me some known & known’s"...unknown and known? "Who on earth bring things like that….".......bringS I just LOVED this, its fresh look on things from your perspective Sheba, you capture an innocence and excitement that you feel just before getting married, which I know is the case with you, and we wish you every happiness in your marriage, and your husband to be too. Thank you for sending us this poem of yours, love from Ann.
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ShePra

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ann.. Loved your

Dear Ann.. Loved your comments. Well I have made changes as advised by you, but the line... “& with little water that still flows from that tap”... is having a significance ... the tap is a part of the childhood plays where I use to wash my muddy hands.. A loads of thanks for your good wishs, its so sweet of you.. Love you always
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

You transport us dear Shepra

Ann of Norway You transport us dear Shepra to your country with its beautiful traditions connected with water, with flowers, with all things magically reinvented by Indian thought to say and mean significant and positive things for our inner minds. This I enjoyed very much, and thank you for appreciating my comment. Love you too, Ann.
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ShePra

16 years ago

Dear Ann with you I have

Dear Ann with you I have started a new world... world of poets... you read my feelings & feel that too that really makes you a wonderful person... I thank you for your love & time that you bestow on me.. hope we will share the bond for long time.. love you always..
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anonymous1

16 years ago

Great Poem

I enjoyed this immensely. Your language made me feel the sorrow of having to leave the familiar and comfortable to set out for a whole new world. The ending highlights so well how our fears are not unfounded as the innocence is ridiculed and yet, there is also much bravery in the simply stated answer. Excellent. Thank you, Lisa
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ShePra

16 years ago

Dear Lisa,I tried to

Dear Lisa, I tried to write You felt the heat With such compliment You completed The whole theme... Thank you very much,you made me happy...
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raj

16 years ago

Very well done ShePra…i

Very well done ShePra...i loved the build up leading to a wonderfull message .. Flowers are for your house… to make it bright Sand is to fill every splinter & water to wash Wash my hands with the dust of my past…… warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...
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raj

16 years ago

ShePra

from the comments of others i understand that you already have or you are about to step into a new experience in life...my best wishes for you to be able to explore all its depths & dimensions..may smiles & peace be yours forever and for keeps...keep sharing the fragrances from the flowers in your backyard..like you have done in this poem...i look forward to reading more of yours... warmly..raj (sublime_ocean)...
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ShePra

16 years ago

Yes you got it right… i

Yes you got it right... i wrote what i felt... thank you very much for your good wishes... i am in TERRIBLE need.. God Bless
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raj

16 years ago

no big deal to wish well for

no big deal to wish well for someone... be well...stay good..wishing you lots of smiles... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...

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