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magics02
May 11, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Candle Flickers In The Dark

 

A candle flickers in the dark
glowing essence upon the wall
swiftly, comes in a breeze
to change the scene
A candle flickers in the dark 

Aromatic senses fill up a room
the wick of a candle burns so bright
dances around, flickers above
serenity takes over, peaceful the night 

A candle flickers in the dark
silenced moments of reflection
dances the shadows upon the wall
A candle flickers in the dark 

Light a candle today for someone
whose presence is gone
hold the light of that candle
To your memory so strong 

A candle flickers in the dark
glowing essence upon the wall
swiftly, comes in a breeze
to change the scene
A candle flickers in the dark


 

mms 5.11.10

— magics02, May 11, 2010

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xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

This is lovely Mona

I love the flow and it has wonderful meaning...nicely done. Rosina xena465
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you Rosalina

For the visit and comment. You have a great day today. Love, Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
mand

mand

16 years 1 month ago

lovely use of language Mona.

lovely use of language Mona. " A candle flickers in the dark, flowing essenses upon the wall.." Aromatic senses fill up a room the wick of a candle burns so bright dances around, flickers above serenity takes over, peaceful the night. I agree with Rosina. Lots of love. Mand
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you My Mandi gal

I always appreciate seeing your face on my pages, and I thank you for your lovely comments, I do like when a verse or line resonates to the reader and of course the love of my candles that dance all over the place, peaceful and serene, I never had a crazy one yet. Candle that is!! LOL Love you gal Mona xoxx TIME well spent is TIME well lived
hobo

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

This is full of mood

I love this very much. I can see myself sitting in the dark watching the candle light dancing against the wall. very nice write my friend
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Hobo your back!!!!

Thank you for the comments on the poem and I am happy it triggered sense of flickers for some here. Of course there is always the romance of the candle too!! Love, Mona xoxoox
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 1 month ago

Candles

Mona, I really liked the repeated section of the candle flickers in the dark. This was a little dark for you, but in an illuminated way (that sounds like a contradiction!). I wanted to be in that room remembering and dreaming with just a dancing candle for company. Good imagery and I like the structure...but what is going on with the 50 lines between each stanza!! Lol! regards, Dan ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks HS

Yes late last nite I worked on it and I see I need to up the spaces, your so good to point that out for me and I shall correct. It really wasnt intended to be dark since I light candles all the time and have many kinds also. I love the way I can relax and meditate just watching those shadows and flickers all over the place and yes the aromatic smell also, always a good thing, thanks for the visit as always and your comments. Love, Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

HS

Does it look better now HS. I am in agreement so!! Thanks for that comment Love, Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 1 month ago

Mona

Mona, now you've sorted out the spaces, I will sleep easier! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
SH

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

i collect candles!

I love this its beautiful and i love candles burning in the dark i get a great sence of peace and calm! Much love Mona! shirley harrison
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Yes bella me too!!!

You know us Italian woman we like wine, roses and candle light.. My been along time lol..never forget the scenes though. Thank you for your continued support of my writes and visits!! Love Ya Gal Mona xoxoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

LOL OH Annie

Long time ago and you'll know if it comes again, the candle will glow along with the wine and the roses. Wasn't that a song long ago I think my mom and dad danced to. Days of wine and roses...I have to go find it Thanks for your visit as always Annie Love, Mona xoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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ngaioBeck

16 years 1 month ago

Candle Flickers

Made me remember. Requiescat. Lovely.
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you

Ngaio for the visit and read, I appreciate that and I love that picture of yours, is that one you painted or one you took? Will be by to catch up on your works also, Glad you remebered something from the poem:) Love,Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

The scented candle finally

The scented candle finally drifted to me, Mona. Though you're looking for the song *Wine and Roses*, I share a song your parents will remember, sung by a 6 yr old, Connie Talbot. I Believe ~ http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=43JDzXY-53M "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

I can not get that one to play here at work try again

I did find the old days of wine and roses dad sang to mom Here it is and of course Moon River is my favorite. Thanks for stopping by How old is this Connie Talbot now? Days Of Wine And Roses by Andy Williams Play song from Lala.com Moon River: The Very Best Of Andy Williams - 1963 - 2:46 TIME well spent is TIME well lived

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