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ESCAPE THE SUNDERING

Like a woodblock split in two
Is how I think
of my tainted love with you

That we love each other
is not the issue
Like a tsunami
crashing, wombing, breaking
flowing, screaming passion

It's not the looks, smoldering
and breathless
oh no-it's the silences
the miscommunication
the missed calls
the sulking
the tears
the screwed up emotions
the damaged ego
the fear of permanency

Mooted wisps of marriage
talk-isn't that the way through
all this morass of joy?
As traditional a union as it is
It's not for us
I fear

The sundered cleaves
the woodblock splits
each a part of the whole
you
me
we

— panaella, May 12, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Wowsers! Kick-arse poem!

Wowsers! Kick-arse poem! Not a word out of place, and I love every word you have written, especially the last paragraph. Gorgeous! ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
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panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you!

Coming from you Anna...that's a great compliment...I appreciate it. Ells xxx
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shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

wow Ells!

wood indeed! i will say that this is fantastic, i totaly agree with Anna on this Is that a dear john for your latest? shirley harrison
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Rally nice one here Pan

Progress in your poetry breeds success and a very well written piece here gal Flow is excellent!! Bravo lady Love, Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Love is like that

A Tidal Wave of emotions...great write Panaella. Rosina xena465
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

you've done it again ellie

'It’s not the looks, smoldering and breathless oh no-it’s the silences the miscommunication...' 'each a part of the whole you me we' such great writing love judy xxx
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

unique write...

wow Ellie....like everyone before me have said i could feel emotional sparks flying hither n dither...a unique begining & ending to boot... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...

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