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my tangerine bubble and I

My tangerine bubble and I
float eye to eye across the sky
over waterfalls and sunsets
and reasons why
beyond avarice and passion
and wanting to die
beyond whales and their backdrop
of stars in the sky
past storms that a mind
would surge in dark tides
to where the sun warms the shores
of an island beyond
and the past and the future
are melded as one.
— Craig Norris, May 23, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Good poem.Imo, please omit

Good poem. Imo, please omit the last "my tangerine bubble and I." It's too good a poem to sound childish. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
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Craig Norris

16 years ago

thank you anna

for your comments, this was rather unfinished, I hope my additions now meet with your approval and that the poem has risen in your opinion. cheers Craig

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