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B-B-BREAKING

B-B-Breaking
B-B-Broken
B-B-Better the heart break
you know

There it goes
Snap!

The last chain-link
of connection
to you
sheared end
piercing
left ventricle
soon the bursting
blood swamping systems

Relief, if relief relieved
should create a calm chasm

Now the S-S-Soul searing
of regret and solitude
into the furnace incandescent

B-B-Broken chains
B-B-Broken links
B-B-Broken friendship
B-B-Broken glimpse of my
transcendence
— panaella, Jun 07, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Pushing the envelope.

Pushing the envelope. Good. ~ "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

i really like this ellie

but the B-B-B was a bit offputting i really think it reads better without it - just me love judy xzx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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panaella

16 years ago

wanted to do something different with the sounds

Hi Judy, Trying to get the sound of sobbing!...you know when you've been crying like a kid and you're catching your breath?...although its freeform...still trying to use poetic devices. Others on here complain free verse isn't very intellectual...well, I'm trying to create and craft something with my words! Luv Ells x

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