Amnesia Light

Once in a while
though, you make me smile like like a freakin' cheshire,

that's when my heart comes undone
and I know you're the one;

'cause you are my fire.

~

Once in a while
even though you tell me not to let 'em in,

but, I still let them anyway
to try and show another way;

I end up hurt, once again.

~

Every once in a while
so late, in the middle of the darkest night,

they're water is causing me to drowned
nothing to cling to, all around;

Please ! Hit me with , "Amnesia Light !"

— docmaverick, Jun 07, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

scribbler

16 years ago

light

we risk being slapped down any time we put ourselves "out there" don't we?Did you mean"their water is causing me to drown" ? Good write on rare subject......scribbler

docmaverick

16 years ago

For some reason, scribbler....

...you have been on the same wavelength as my episodical writes. Conglomerated thinking would be my final answer. Thanks, for the words of encouragement. Your thoughts are greatly appreciated. Later on...in print. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Doc

I've often felt that drowing feeling...to be honest, I think I'm drowning most of the time, no matter the choices I make in life. Xena

docmaverick

16 years ago

I hear that, Xena....

...but, with "her" being my fire...I came up with "water", as the opposite.....ya know? Anyhoo, I appreciate your candid response. It's certainly, greatly appreciated. Thanks for taking the time to read, AND then to comment. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

xena465

16 years ago

Silly me Doc...

To get it wrong!!! Wish someone would hit me with `Amnesia Light` and put out my fire. Maybe some torrential rain would do the trick Doc, ha, ha. Xena

docmaverick

16 years ago

Hey, Xena....

...would that make you an Aquarius? You know, a "water bearer"? Not to worry, merely more, convoluted thinking. :) "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

xena465

16 years ago

Hi Doc

I'm an Aquarian Pisces. Years ago, my birth-sign used to fall between the two, depending on which magazine I read it from. In some of them Pisces was from the 21st and in others it was the 19th and I'm the 20th Feb. So when it was the 21st I was an Aquarian? I haven’t seen that for many years though. Xena

docmaverick

16 years ago

Hey, Xena....

...I am also an Aquarian, having a birthday on January 22nd...puts me on the other cusp of the sign, right by Capricorn; either way.....I sensed your Aquarianistic influences...or tendencies; proving I either had some very astute observations.....or else, I'm just "all wet". You go, girl ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

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