lou

Jun 11, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Hangman's Noose

Legend spread far and wide
the vampire highwayman
and his monstrous lover Viola

Blood thirsty rape and pillage
no stage coach or maiden was safe
for that was his trade

One night the law drew near
a massacre ensued
an unholy battle

The Gallows did call
a hollow laugh let loose from Jack's breast
for he knew his life could never be taken

Malevolent twinkle in his eye
slipped the hangman's noose
and took flight

No end no retribution

THIRD PART OF HIGHWAYMAN JACK TRILOGY.

— lou, Jun 11, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Critiques

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lou

Well done, liked your dark poetry a truth or myth who knows? for the end just a suggestion love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

16 years ago

Jayne

Thank you love lou xx

Kailashana

16 years ago

ensued, an unholy

*ensued*, *an* unholy battle... I like the ending, lou...very much. ~A "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi

lou

16 years ago

Thanks

Thanks lou xx

judyanne

16 years ago

scary lou

a massacre in sued (ensued) love the ending love judy xx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

lou

16 years ago

Hi Judy

I did spell check the poem, the programe must be faulty lol. Thanks lou xx

judyanne

16 years ago

program's not faulty lou

'en' and 'sued' are both words :) had a 'grate pom' that showed how 'spill chicks' are not infallable wish i could find it - it is very funny love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

lou

16 years ago

LOL

I was joking love lou xx

xena465

16 years ago

Nice one Lou

Spell-check is only a guide. It's not always accurate e.g. grammar and sense of the line or sentence, but it’s a great help for me, as I'm hopeless with spelling and grammar. That’s why I love when someone sees something that the spell-check didn’t pick up. Xena

lou

16 years ago

Hi

I know the way spell check works, the comment that I made , to Judy was a joke. But thanks anyway. Lou xx

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi i love the theme for sure a good write with great words strung together ,,zigs

lou

16 years ago

Zigs

Thank you. love lou xx

shirley harrison

16 years ago

beautiful

i love this lou, its like a small film! ps spell check faulty mine definately is thats my excuse and i'm sticking to it! shirley harrison

lou

16 years ago

Solidarity lol

Thanks shirley, we are of the same opion re spellcheck Lol louxxx

DawningDaytripper

16 years ago

This was very charming Lou,

This was very charming Lou, a little vampire always perks me up! LOL I have a few suggestions, take what you need and just leave the rest. Legend spread far and wide {of}the vampire highwayman and his monstrous lover Blood thirsty {they}rape and pillage no stage coach or maiden was safe for that was his trade One night the law drew near and a {Bloody} massacre ensued {on} an unholy battle{field} The hangman’s noose did call a hollow laugh let loose {from} his breast for he knew his last breath couldn’t be taken {He}Made good his escape through Hades and like before Viola arms wrapped about him how do we seperate the truth from the myth? I don't know, just trying to help. LOL, I like playing with it very much!! Julie D.D.

lou

16 years ago

DD

thank you , your suggestions make sense. love lou xx

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