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Smooth Subversive Groove

Slip into
Subversive Groove
So smooth, so smooth a move
It slides
    Beyond the truth
At hand
The sands of…
Stand upon my   
    dancing feet

So sweet
    Subversive Groove

Prove your love
Too meek
    A heart
Of weakened beat
Won’t do.
You have to prove…

Black is not too
Dark for you
Loose…
All that can be
Free…
That which is not
    Found.

Bound By that which is
Hollow pounds
Below the base of sound
Roll around
The sparseness of this space.

A race that
Won’t be won
    (be one)
Run…
Run…
Running from
Feeling
(something)
Doing all
That can be done

A thought I had.
A bit of fun
In darkened,
    Open,
Blackened
    Room.

Doom is…

Unassuming
(Soothing)

so Smooth
Subversive
Groove…
— Damo, Jun 18, 2010

Critiques

lou

lou

15 years 12 months ago

Damo

I love this poem , it's so perfectly musical love lou xx
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

had to read it a few times

and still i'm getting more each time especially love - 'Bound By that which is Hollow pounds Below the base of sound Roll around The sparseness of this space.' love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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Damo

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks for reading and

Thanks for reading and hearing the music in it, Lou. Also glad you enjoyed it, Judy. Thanks for your high ratings too, very flattering.

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