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web-footed dark brown beaver

==

web-footed
dark brown
beaver

braves those currents of
a recent-born creek having
chosen the least

resistant though stream
indifferent rushes past her in
restless search of

another waterway
larger then another yet
another until

a vast community
finds its course at last to the
globe-embracing sea ...

and once there to
stagnate stultify to fester
to discharge the smell

of choking grease and
too of a terrible dying

==
— barbsdad2003, Jun 22, 2010

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Mark

Mark

15 years 11 months ago

The beaver is lucky

the rivers are getting better slowly up to down but the mouth still spills way too much of what is not good. I love your word structures Chuck. Thanks, Mark people who hate attract people who hate and in the end they all end up hating each other
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barbsdad2003

15 years 11 months ago

Thanx, Mark

I greatly appreciate your reading, commenting. BP's ongoing oil spill (as well the beaver who lives in the creek behind my backyard) prompted me to pen this riverine piece. Thanx right back, Chuck

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