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The Heir - The Air

E(x)ternal imagined, its energy in-min[(e)(d)]. Equable in-vision:
Impervious eyes. Well faired. in warm winter – Air Is – in-hailed
Then air is. Ex-hailed. Air is. In-took and then is: ex-spelled.
Ex-halting the air – The Heir – Is the(a)ir:

    Revoltened. Resinous. Residue;
    Re-cyclic remains are rightly returned   
    Re-changing the flame – re-chaining;   
    Re-claiming the same: a gain
    Again and a gain and again;
    Re-naming the smoulders of rain.

The game is plain:- Inside.
In side it is plain – plain’ with his zein; again. And outside
It’s plain – in Time. Out side it’s plain’ in va(e)in.

In place and on going, it’s gone from the main…

Gone from the main – it trains,
Its lefting the brain:
De-maim.
De-maim, de-suffer – de-suffer the slain.
In-sain’
It’s writing whats left in the brain:

    Surrender - a stroke – an inking is spoke
    And summonsed a slithery snake
    A snake scent to spin
    Sneak, swirl and seduce:
    A snake scent to strike at the fire.

Soothing; its scolding -
A soul is evolving -
Bandaged by burning: desire.

— Damo, Jun 30, 2010

Critiques

Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

I can only smile and bow in

I can only smile and bow in front of a poetic painting. ~A The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron
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Damo

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks!

Heheh! This one's a bit crrrrazzy! An abstraction - a meditation... rhyme, aliteration, assonance, onomatopoeia...etc...textured...tonal!
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Damo

What a crrrrazzy! An abstraction - a meditation… rhyme, aliteration, assonance, onomatopoeia…etc…textured…tonal! good job(wink) MONA
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Damo

Go aussie, I loved this one, painting the words ... I bow with ~A love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Ops,Sorry

I forgot the stars ,but your poem need all the stars in the sky ,I bow with Seren and Anna.
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

And oh

it should be nominated too;everybody should read it.
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Damo

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks again

Thanks for your ind words - this one is a bit obscure so I kinda wasn't really expecting any response. It is nice that you all have felt inspired to respond. Thanks. :-)
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

if picasso had used words.....

fantasically interesting (w)rite so adore the last three lines take a bow damo love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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Shula

15 years 11 months ago

The Heir- the Air

I have discovered your poetry tonight,have only read this one so far,it is cleverly written and the alliteration you have used Impresses the meaning you portray. I shall return and read more another time. sheila

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