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LZ

Conversation with Dad part 2: Father's Consent

(Son): You think you kill me with your scoff            But “Dadda” it’s what I live off            I struck a match, career blast-off!            My life needs no consent (Dad): You say this boy and you have guts            It’s either that, or you’re just nuts!            You’re just so lost, and you’ll get cuts            You don’t have the talent (Son): I’m a fetus of performance            And I’ll grow with great importance            I don’t need your help or guidance            I’ll do this on my own (Dad): You’re not alone, for we’re entwined            You won’t do this! No son of mine!            Or anyone in my bloodline            Together we are sewn (Son): At last I think I’ve found your fear            I’ll always hold your brother dear            However dad, if he were here            Ambitions, he’d rejoice (Dad): His ambitions were his blunder            From that road left him asunder            Went from top to six feet under            You can’t make that same choice (Son): I know you’re scared, but I have time            To find the ladders I must climb            Increase my joy of flow and rhyme            For who I want to be (Dad): I guess you’re right son, it’s your life            I hope you have kids, with a wife            To let you go will be my strife            But later, you’ll be free     
— Lil Z, Jul 17, 2010

Critiques

xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Lovely wit

Great addition to your first one Lil it’s a very creative idea for poems well done. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

Thanks Xena!

I'm always happy when you stop by and leave your supportive comments!
Loreli

Loreli

15 years 11 months ago

I really like this

I was there with you in this conversation... Your ability to rhyme is wonderful! Lori
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magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Lil Z

You got it going on friend with this piece. You amaze me of your talent and I am so happy to have met you here on Neopoet and hope you stick around so I may continue to see your growth as a writer and a song writer also. Bravo to you dearest of friends Much love and hugs out to you Lil Z Love Mona Magics Mum
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

Mia Mona!

Thank you very much for your support, I think we will be amazing friends for years to come!
ifoundaplace

ifoundaplace

15 years 10 months ago

Lil Z

That's awasome! Good job (: Dani
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 10 months ago

Thanks Dani!

Thank you for the support, I appreciate it!

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