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weirdelf
13 years 8 months ago
I hesitate to offer critique,
I hesitate to offer critique,
is there a reason you posted this as a blog rather than a poem?
brittle light
13 years 8 months ago
this was written and posted
this was written and posted on August 18, 2011. It is the last piece I've written since then. I was writing more during that time, and exceeded the one poem per day rule...so I bent the rules a little by posting as a blog (something I did often).
I recently read it and felt and urgent need to revise it, but it seems destined to remain on the blog page
Is your hesitation to critique based on the fact that it is a blog? or something more sinister!!! (lol). Please, fire away if you indeed have some thoughts on this. It would be appreciated, as always.
respectfully, and cheers to you too
p.s. that is the first time I have ever written "(lol)" on anything. I'll try not to let it happen again!!!
weirdelf
13 years 8 months ago
I respect a man who doesn't lol [grins]
Love the poem. I hesistated because I wonder if poems posted as blogs are just trying to get around the one-a-day rule (stoically refrains from lol-ing)
My only critique is that I think one more verse would re-inforce the idea of 'spectacular misunderstandings'.