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A Cruel Joke

Some older guy bought these kids some beer (Bud).
In the woods while drinking came a thud,
soon showed up the ‘Hoods’ wanting that ‘Bud’.
They came up to them Laughing and joking wanting the goods!

Through half-closed ears (from that beer)
They could barely hear (with snickers and sneers)
“I have a razor, wanna shave their balls?”
“No No No” (that was the end of the party for them all)

So, they staggery run down gravel road (and run some more)
Until safe at one’s back half open screen door.
Those Hoods, they drank all that Budweiser beer
whilst laughing hardy at their cruel joke singing, ‘Bottles on the Wall’.

(You know, 99 bottles of beer on the Wall)

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Last Few Words: I have not written in some time so pleaase have at it!

Style/Type: Free verse

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Region, Country: USA the bay state, United Kingdom, Australia, South Africa, Nigeria, Canada, Europe, USA

Favorite Poets: Dylon, George Harrison, Leonard Cohen, Jess, Rett, Black Mountain Gang

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