fledermaus

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Fences

Posted Feb 9, 2010 · 29 lines · 2 critiques

The head parts clouds,

Soft rays come out,

Released upon a fertile ground.

The ground’s a gut, which

Harkens back to

Greener grass of pastures past.

Sunrays flicker on and off,

A Morse code tapped through fate’s blue trough.

It sends a signal clout to

Dreamers and to larks, and

The gut it rumbles, ready to depart.

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There’s art to skipping fences.

‘The knot is gone,’ the head yells on,

‘But it’s a foolishness, is this.

The fence is fair to keep you there,

Comfort is a word for bliss to many other lips.’

The fence remains unpainted hence,

You score it with newfound intent,

In the pastels of the parlours

That found you when you left your home,

In amour with the world.

And that single word you snared in ink,

Draws envy for the flight of birds.

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Received a critique
on Fences from @Ink Dragon
"it's been a while since I saw you around. I could have sworn I had already commented on this poem... weird. I will have to check my posts. Real comment coming your way soon! Yours, ~Nina"
09 Tue

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Fences
"The head parts clouds,"
Open thread 29 lines
02 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
December 2009
01 Tue

Critiqued
"Blood and Alcohol" by @Breakinglogic
"I can see an MC doing something magical with this. Have you ever heard Edan? It reminded me of his work a little bit, and I imagined one of his rhythms when I read it to myself."
01 Tue

First critique offered
on "Blood and Alcohol" by @Breakinglogic
01 Tue

Received a critique
on Fell Breath from @Breakinglogic
"Maybe I am too fast to rate and too amature to tell good from great, but I must say, this is one of my favorite poems I have ever read. I am very glad to have come across this since I scarcely find time to read and comm…"
November 2009
30 Mon

Posted a poem
Fell Breath
"Wine stained those lips,"
Open thread 37 lines
17 Tue

Received a critique
on Tunnels from @Kailashana
"(Although my nails are long enough.) Interesting poem, Poet. I'll have to chew on it some more. I like your pen name. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~…"
17 Tue

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Tunnels
"Riding on the underground, long into the tunnel dark."
Open thread 10 lines
August 2009
30 Sun

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Raised glass to river whispers
"All while she’s standing free,"
Open thread 37 lines
May 2009
06 Wed

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"2. Isaac"
Open thread 27 lines
April 2009
11 Sat

Received a critique
on The Pub from @Bosscombat
"some well tight writing there man! i enjoyed it a lot hey. top kudos for you! Bosscombat"
11 Sat

Received a critique
on 夏の骨折り　 'Natsu no Honeori - The Toil of Summer' from @Ink Dragon
"unfortunately, I cannot read Japanese, but I love the sound of your Japanese lines (thanks for including a transcription). Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine non…"
11 Sat

Posted a poem
夏の骨折り　 'Natsu no Honeori - The Toil of Summer'
"田んぼでは、"
Open thread 9 lines
08 Wed

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The Pub
"The bawdry one’s ruddy cheek went pale,"
Open thread 13 lines
February 2009
08 Sun

Received a critique
on Quivers Again from @Proprietress of Crimson Hearts
"Mr. "Bat", Sir, this is one fine write! I am going to have to agree with Richard up there and say that I am looking forward to your next post! oh, and I love your name, by the way ;-) your Proprietress"
07 Sat

Received a critique
on Quivers Again from @themoonman
"such anger on your pages... strong write! you took an over-written topic and made it new and alive for me. She had the gall to call me "bro"... loved that line and several others here... you do have the flavorful way of…"
06 Fri

Posted a poem
Quivers Again
"So I thought about what my friend said,"
Open thread 32 lines
05 Thu

Received a critique
on The Great American Fairy Trail from @themoonman
"Welcome to the site... this poem has quite a refreshing quality... realism... something not everyone can reach. enjoyed the poem, loved the barboy breaks... made it the dream-like-telling of things gone by... damn fairy…"
04 Wed

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Just Another Funny Drama Day in Play, Lovers
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Open thread 47 lines
03 Tue

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The Great American Fairy Trail
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Posted a poem
The Great American Fairy Trail
"Barboy hands me a fresh lime rum, as"
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on Fell Breath from @Breakinglogic

on Tunnels from @Kailashana

on The Pub from @Bosscombat

on 夏の骨折り 'Natsu no Honeori - The Toil of Summer' from @Ink Dragon

on Quivers Again from @Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

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