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Nov 10, 2012
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Promises
He promised me ecstasy
I got sausage and chips
He promised me kisses twee
too short on my lips
He got down on one knee
couldn't get up with his hips
he promised me he was free
my ear his girl clips
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
BettyBuff
12 years 8 months ago
Quite enjoyed the humour...
Hi,
Quite enjoyed the humour in lines 1-6. Line 7 was the denouement...but I just don't get like 8!...LOL
'Betty'
BettyBuff
12 years 8 months ago
Quite enjoyed the humour...
Hi,
Quite enjoyed the humour in lines 1-6. Line 7 was the denouement...but I just don't get like 8!...LOL
'Betty'
sueb
12 years 8 months ago
Hi Betty glad u enjoyed the
Hi Betty glad u enjoyed the humour in this little one x
weirdelf
12 years 8 months ago
A friend of mine slept with another friend of mine
She abused my, as if I made them do it!
She said "I expected sushi and got hamburger"
Sex is stupid. Unless it is very very good.
I loved this poem and look forward to more of yours.
sueb
12 years 8 months ago
Hi thanks so much glad u
Hi thanks so much glad u liked this little one all the best x