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Nov 12, 2012
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Living Tomb
I'm a living tomb
my baby has died in my womb
I have to let nature take its course
Can't bear this, what could be worse?
I'm still getting many a smile
people don't know my turmoil
My baby has died
I still haven't cried
the sadness buried inside
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Candlewitch
12 years 8 months ago
Dear Sueb,
Firat of all may I offer my condolences for your tragic situation and condition? This happened to my Aunt, several years ago. I remember her long months of sorrow. It broke my heart to see. The whole poem expresses a spirit put on hold. It made me cry. I found these words very poignant:
My baby has died
I still haven't cried
the sadness buried inside
I wish you the best and much happiness in your future.
always, Cat
sueb
12 years 8 months ago
Hi Candlewitch this is not
Hi Candlewitch this is not personal to me but one I had to write a sensitive and sad subject I purposely kept it simple thanks for a wonderful comment x