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Every Other
Decidedly a blues tune
with it's haunting melody,
paving the way
for shades of grey,
as Autumn undresses every other tree;
and I notice in every other pair
of eyes, I look into...
..a tear, with so much sadness
it reminds my eyes of a time I cried for you.
Then, my chest begins to catch it's breath
and my eyes can't stop the "blur",
and I wanna go back to the way things used to be;
there is no doubt in my heart
how lucky we both were,
when your eyes.....they used to smile, because of me.
Definately a minor key
where the notes bend in, and out...
been in those shoes
and, I've paid my dues,
every other soul knows what I'm on, about.
And, I notice in every other pair
of eyes, I look into...
..a tear, with so much sorrow,
it reminds my eyes of a time I cried for, you.
Then, my chest begins to catch it's breath
and, my eyes can't stop the "blur",
and, I wanna go back to the way things used to be;
there is no doubt in my heart
how lucky we both were,
when your eyes.....they used to smile, because of me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I can see, now.....it's a bit of a "song". Didn't intend for that to appear. doc.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
docmaverick
14 years 6 months ago
Thanx, Shirl...
..you know, I think it may be a potential song. Who knows, right tune, and singer.....
love your life,
doc.
mona
14 years 6 months ago
Obviously from the heart
LOVE IT
Dear Doc. this is very beautiful poem from the heart.