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Dec 20, 2010
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Cold
I remember the way that you touched me
the way that you hand felt in mine,
your lips were so soft
.
In my mind’s eye I capture
the way that you looked at me,.
as if you loved me too much.
Vowed our love was eternal
with every word you uttered,
and deed completed.
But now you’re cold
icy, as frigid air,
the chill winds blow.
I live and breathe despair
but you won’t return.
I am unloved
About This Poem
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Comments
lou
14 years 7 months ago
Shirl
Thanks
Lou
mand
14 years 7 months ago
Hiya Lou
A sad ending - but one that many will relate to.
Thank you for sharing
Love Mand xxxxxxxx
lou
14 years 7 months ago
Hallo Mand
this was inspired by a very old relationship.
lou
Kailashana2
14 years 7 months ago
Lou, though I love poetry
Lou, though I love poetry born from a lover's rejection and know intimately its pain, I will this time speak as I would to my daughter....
Know that life has a series of lovers for you. And the one that left only left you because there are many lovers yet to be known. He made room for them to enter your life. And each lover brings you the same gift with their leaving.
~A
lou
14 years 7 months ago
Anna
thanks
lou
lou
14 years 7 months ago
Jayne
The feeling is real, but the realationship was long ago.
thank you
love always lou