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Dec 14, 2012
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if only 'twere my hands....
I would've be able to answer you
touch me not
for the love of life,
my hands are scorching bloody white hot
you seem to touch many a hands
never mind
I hate one night stands
Not that I profess others to ignore
sex is loving
for only true lovers for sure…
if you are one
hold her hand
but only if till you can stand
if there is no vulgarity
serenity is all we look into it...
its naturality
and sexiness shall be privy
please note
wonderful edit by Ian
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 7 months ago
Loved
The theme is fine just a little more me think's..
Your title word twere needs an apostrophe and the, blooody hot white, would be better if it was "bloody white hot" just the two o's in bloody and to switch the last two words it would go with line two..
Take care out there and have a great weekend,
Yours Ian.T
PS:- I shall stick to using my own Hands, not the one with the Black spot, or was that Blind Pugh, La La..