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Forget-us-not

Oh, your love has untethered, unbound me
Heart beats an intimate dance, called romance
Your gnawing need for me, and mine for thee
consumes, alternate reality, a trance
I'm floating on cloud nine, sweet ecstasy
Ah, can this last eternally? perchance
Reflected gaze I feel like a beauty
My feelings broad as the oceans expanse
Your my soulmate, my best friend, my happy
No formula, not an exact science
except one on one, may add upto three
I appreciate our dalliance
Flirting is the fuel that keeps love red hot
tempted by another forget-us-not

— sueb, Dec 20, 2012

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

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13 years 5 months ago

hi Sue

very emotive. Were it me I'd break it into stanzas but that's just me. And the varied rhyme pattern does not detract.............stan

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