sueb

Dec 22, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Felt

The sound of silence
can fill a room
the atmosphere
clouded in gloom
anger permeates the air
not said, but its there

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

Comments

weirdelf

12 years 7 months ago

This is the best poem of yours I have read.

No mushy stuff, no wasted words.

It's not entirely original, but what is in 12000 years of human literature?

Go for the sparsity and economy of words.

Bloody welll done.

To be honest, when I read your first works they kind of tingled but seemed soppy. I think you are growing as a poet.

sueb

12 years 7 months ago

thanks a mil Jess appreciated

thanks a mil Jess appreciated glad u liked this little one have a merry christmas and a merrier new year all the best
Sue

scribbler

12 years 7 months ago

I'll go out on a limb and make a suggestion on a free verse poem (which I'm not that good at). That last line... maybe unstated or unsaid instead of not said. Just an idea from an old rhymer lol. But I Do like the brevity in getting the point across.................stan

sueb

12 years 7 months ago

thanks so much Stan glad u

thanks so much Stan glad u liked this one have a gr8 christmas
all the best
Sue x

sueb

12 years 7 months ago

thanks so much Mark so glad u

thanks so much Mark so glad u enjoyed have a gr8 christmas x

Frenchf

12 years 7 months ago

A humdinger short and sweet.

A humdinger short and sweet. The best

sueb

12 years 6 months ago

thanks glad u enjoyed this

thanks glad u enjoyed this one all the best sueb x

Ian.T

12 years 6 months ago

Sueb

A very good thought, put to words.
There is a cliché of something like "You could cut the atmosphere with a knife"
You have regenerated it.
Well done, Yours Ian.T

sueb

12 years 6 months ago

thanks Ian T glad u enjoyed

thanks Ian T glad u enjoyed this little one all the best sueb x