Rula

Dec 23, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Be Mine (proposal)

YOU might not be
as pretty
as some singers
nor shiny
as Hollywood stars

I might not be
as rich as Gates
nor genius
as Einstein

But I want to be yours
and you to be mine

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Ian.T

12 years 7 months ago

Rula

I can't sing very well but the intelligence is ok, I thought I asked you not to talk about it yet lol.
This piece of yours needs a little work the theme is good, though the execution is not so good, the flow using those names didn't work, the Gates caused a problem there are a few more rich one to choose from that will fit the bill, then you could find two that compliment each other.
Take care young Lady and know you are in our thoughts, Yours Ian.T

Rula

12 years 7 months ago

Ian

interesting comment. when I composed this, an image inspired. I am not sure what other names might be less problematic as no structure is intended here. it is intended to be free more than structured though it rhymed by the end.
Would appreciate some suggestions.

judyanne

12 years 7 months ago

yes i like this rula

simple and effective
some might say hallmarky,
- but elite hallmark i'd say
:)
love judy
xxx

Rula

12 years 7 months ago

Hello Judy

elite Hallmark .
I think I'll start a business.
Would you share me? 50-50 :)
No offence intended

judyanne

12 years 7 months ago

lol

depends on if it's a typo on your behalf
50-5 or 50-50 ??
:)
love judy
xxx

Rula

12 years 7 months ago

percentage

Corrected ..Will you now

judyanne

12 years 7 months ago

absolutely xx

Rula

12 years 7 months ago

:) Mark!

Have you ever read my profile ?

Rula

12 years 7 months ago

Mark

either I misunderstood your comment or you misunderstood my piece .
Don't worry. I am so happy you've dropped by, enjoyed the lines and left the comment .
Have a nice day...

Rula

12 years 7 months ago

sorry

duplicated

Rula

12 years 6 months ago

my apology mark

a misunderstanding from my end as i said.Appreciate your words and the clarification :)
Thank you

scribbler

12 years 7 months ago

Hi Rula

You know I don't do much free verse so my opinions about them don't count for much. But I read over this 3-4 times and couldn't find anything I'd change...........stan

Rula

12 years 6 months ago

hi Stan

for me every comment counts and i know you'd not spare to offer any
Thank you

Nordic cloud

12 years 6 months ago

Sweet story. Love Ann.

Sweet story.

Love Ann.

Rula

12 years 6 months ago

Anna

The full story isn't written yet, just a proposal for marraige though it is nothing of my culture, I liked to try something as inspired by a picture as I said to Ian . Hope you are well
Thanks for dropping by .