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Dec 29, 2012
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Mum's Fave
A destructive cuckoo in the nest
trouble causing what he do best
he'll put your patience to the test
with one eye open he like to rest
Loves being an annoying pest
mischief chasing with zest
I'd like to cough him of my chest
My temper he play with and molest
I held him longer on my breast
my favourite, my maternal lust
my confession hidden in his dust
Love so explosive, I could burst
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 5 months ago
Sueb
This sounds ok for an over loved spoilt child, there are a few moves of words that an accent has caused a drift,
I shall copy and send to my Edit side and see what happens and will PM anything I do, Yours Ian.T