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Eyes yours and mine .........2010

today a fundamental was cleared
it's all about eyes,

I thought mine
were the most beautiful
till I saw yours

your eyes are
much more wonderful
mine even today
are stared at by guys and gals
old women and men
also look into them

what they adore
I’d love to know
for sure....

but friend
you mustn't close your eyes
as they love yours

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

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Frenchf

12 years 6 months ago

Gr8

But could one of the "more" s be replaced?

loved

loved

12 years 6 months ago

yeah i know

i follow will do some knifing tomorrow
busy today thanks

loved

loved

12 years 6 months ago

thank you ever so much

I have just added her as my poetic fan
I adore for her boldness

I'm glad we learn from each other here
tc
A very happy new year to you too.. regards