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Jan 02, 2013
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Eyes yours and mine .........2010
today a fundamental was cleared
it's all about eyes,
I thought mine
were the most beautiful
till I saw yours
your eyes are
much more wonderful
mine even today
are stared at by guys and gals
old women and men
also look into them
what they adore
I’d love to know
for sure....
but friend
you mustn't close your eyes
as they love yours
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Frenchf
12 years 6 months ago
Gr8
But could one of the "more" s be replaced?
loved
12 years 6 months ago
Yeah and thanks
will see later when ..and which one ??
loved
12 years 6 months ago
yeah i know
i follow will do some knifing tomorrow
busy today thanks
Frenchf
12 years 6 months ago
" but friend you musn't close
" but friend you musn't close your eyes as they love yours?
Does. THis work?
loved
12 years 6 months ago
thank you ever so much
I have just added her as my poetic fan
I adore for her boldness
I'm glad we learn from each other here
tc
A very happy new year to you too.. regards