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Jan 10, 2013
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Sound of Wheels Making Crazy
The sound of wheels
in my head
drives me crazy
My tableau played out
over and over
my life lazy
For all my planning
I fuck it up
more times easily
Compartmentalise
and file away
retrieve it
slowly
savour it all
for time will be
when the wheels
drop off wearily
memories melt
into grey
nanospheres
no image sharply
And then
the ache
of the spirit
whirly-giging
click,click
back to youth
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Frenchf
12 years 6 months ago
Says it all
Life in a bottled verse
Couldn't be worse!
Thank you
BettyBuff
12 years 6 months ago
Hi Mr C
Thanks.....are you performing your work yet, if not, why not?
Mrs C x
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
Ello Ells
I really liked this one but I had an unsettling feeling while I read this one dont ask me why but I did, by the way we all fuck up sometimes, no one person is perfect
cant see anything I would change I thought this one was a little to the left if you know what I mean in a good way of course lol nice work as usual nice to read you again :)
hugs n love ~
BettyBuff
12 years 6 months ago
Left of Centre...
Yup, spot on as usual J-C! I'm 50 next month...I feel the chill wind of all my fuck-ups rushing past me, reminding me of my mortality. I'm sure I'll have a jolly time on my big 5-0 and drink enough to erase and create a few more to help me slide into comfortable middle-age! I was absolutely fine with being 40...but 50, well...there' no denying it. I'm not young anymore. I don't like it! LOL
Ells x
Frenchf
12 years 6 months ago
Are you mrs C?
Is he mr.C. Then 50 shouldn't worry you. You have a winner in ephraim!