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crypticbard
crypticbard
Jan 11, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Peering through cigarette smoke

Forget
the balm of barometric exuberance.
This night
no longer young, dissipates.

Recall
a dewy welcome of sun-quaffed green.
Yesterdays
revive severed umbilical dreams.

Peruse
this present but fleeting acumen.
Today
ceases yet emerges again tomorrow.

Ignite
that kindling of autumnal reticence.
Perhaps
genial kindnesses shall spring.

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About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West Moreton, AUS

Favorite Poets: There is nothing quite as boring as a life completely devoid of shadows.

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Seren

Seren

12 years 5 months ago

Ello :))

I cant believe this one wasnt commented on I really liked it, Yes its different from your normal fare but I liked the ending, I cant see anything I can offer to you content wise and I liked the single words then the next line it gave great effect

love Jayne-Chloe xxx

Frederick Kesner

Frederick Kesner

12 years 5 months ago

thank you kindly JC

Indeed, it is slightly different, a bit experimental. I am happy that you liked it. You are much appreciated. Have a happy Australia Day!

Seren

Seren

12 years 5 months ago

You have a great Australia

You have a great Australia Day its pouring down rain here so we are staying home to celebrate

Hugs Jc xxx

Frederick Kesner

Frederick Kesner

12 years 5 months ago

7.2 (not on the Richter Scale)

"A poet falls in love with an art student who gravitates to his bohemian lifestyle -- and his love of heroin. Hooked as much on one another as they are on the drug, their relationship alternates between states of oblivion, self-destruction, and despair."

Not sure about this, but because it's about poetry... We shall see...

Seren

Seren

12 years 5 months ago

hmmmm I havent seen it

Not sure if its on here ... I might have to take a look ... poetry hmmm it will be really
good or appallingly bad ! Lol

Jc xxx

Frederick Kesner

Frederick Kesner

12 years 5 months ago

you be the judge!

They only featured 3 poems, or parts of 3 poems. 2 from Heath's character (the poet) and one from ee cummings which he read out to Candy and proposed after the reading:

(1) like a prologue:

When I first met candy,
those were like the days of juice.
when everything was bountiful.
birds filled the sky
(a) great kindness flowed through us.

2) the proposal poem:

Here's the deepest secret nobody knows.
here's the root of the root and the bud of the bud
and the sky of the sky of a tree called life
which grows higher than soul can hope or mind can hide
and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart
I carry your heart, I carry it i my heart

ee cummings

and (3) the rantings and ravings of a dope-filled mind:

we had a lot going for us
we'd found the secret glue
that held all things together
in a perfect place,
where the noise did not intrude
our world was so very complete

What do you think?

loved

loved

12 years 5 months ago

your creativity is as astounding

as your smoke screen on Aussie day
being spent indoors
so now you have a solid excuse
to smoke more
go ahead...
if you will
enjoy you all still

Frederick Kesner

Frederick Kesner

12 years 5 months ago

from smoke to cyclone

we're in for a rough one.
What a start for the year!
Bush fires & cyclones.
Primary services are also in danger of ceasing:
water, electricity, gas, telecom, and sanity.
Brace yourself, Brisbane City!