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the_fool
the_fool
Jan 21, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

water beds (my first haiku)

fish finished fucking,
both breathless and soaked, must one
sleep in the dry spot?

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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Austin, TX, USA

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weirdelf

weirdelf

12 years 5 months ago

Cool!

and steamy.
Love it.
And reminded of why WC Fields claimed he never drank water "fish fuck in it"

themoonman

themoonman

12 years 5 months ago

loved it ...

and here we are thinking water beds are cool

great imagery and focus here, title couldn't have
been better, a truly unique poem.

thanks for posting !!!