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Jan 31, 2013
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The net husband
Married men, married men
Always looking out the pen
Desperate not to leave the fold
Seeking cos they're growing old
Wondering bout their fading looks
Not thinking who'll be the cook,
do the washing, be the cleaner
Men grow older, they get meaner
Females seeking men on net
Will eventually hunt and get
Stupid married searching men
Hoping life will come again
In the form of twelve years younger
Than the current aging mother
Of their children and of them
thoughtless silly married men
God bless gay men not much better
but you could say of the latter
I was not born with the part
That was vital to his heart
That was why he chose to leave me
Needed robust masculinity
Which is displayed on computers
Free for curious observers
Hope your husband seeks a gay man
They are not the type to stay man
Avoid searching married men
Keep alert, run far from them
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Prompted by sue b's poem!
Review Request Direction:
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
sueb
12 years 5 months ago
Similar subject as mine great
Similar subject as mine great write much enjoyed cheers sueb x
loved
12 years 5 months ago
extocity overpowers you gayism empowers you don't be so
extocity overpowers you
gayism empowers you
don't be so
doomed
it’s all in their genes
that's why that guy made jeans
now a day’s gals and guys
wear the same zippers in front
direct aim
men can use it in two ways
the zipper women betrays
they have to pull pants down
but wait a new pipe is on its way
some lady scientist was here that to say …
it’s on her mind any ways..
you are Frenchy lovely gal
what imagination experience you've had
I wonder!!!
in the form of twelve* years younger
than the current aging mother
no now days the guys go for 25 or 35 or 55 years difference
if they can afford alimony
just for a night's delight
in made up mental harmony
In the form of twelve* years younger
Than the current aging mother
NO NOW A DAYS THE GUYS GO FOR 25 OR 35 OR 55 YEARS DIFFERENCE
IF THEY CAN AFFORD ALIMONY
JUST FOR A NIGHT'S DELIGHT
IN MADE UP MENTAL HARMONY
Frenchf
12 years 5 months ago
Made this up just for you
Who is "loved"
Why do you call yourself loved?
Do you think you're from above?
Are you thin or are you fat
Have you acted like a rat?
Do you come from Canada
Is your name young Amanda
I know nothing about you
And most others say so too
When I ask you to speak more
You reply so's not to show
Who you are or where you come from
Why you don't want us to let on
Are you black or are you white?
Are you someone of the night?
Please p.m me just today
So that I can to you say
I know you.
loved
12 years 5 months ago
black
black ....
LIKE AN ELEPHANT
A BLACK BULL
A BLACK BOARD
BLACK SAND
SO MUCH FOR LOOKS
HEART BLOOD RED
UNDERSTOOD
Frenchf
12 years 5 months ago
You are a man
That is a masculine comment. Am I right?
scribbler
12 years 5 months ago
Hello
searching married men.......nice phrase. I liked the content and subdued rhyme. I Do wonder why you didn't break this into stanzas though. Stanzas can help organize thoughts in poetry just as paragraphs do in prose.......................stan
Frenchf
12 years 5 months ago
Ok will do
As last verse has 11 lines