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Feb 08, 2013
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Broken Heart
A heart never broken
pristine and sterile
I pity their perfection
their memories futile
An unbroken heart
has not life experience
has not taken part
never suffered a grievance
A broken heart is a lesson
hard to learn but needed
its a beautiful blessing
hopefully not oft repeated
A broken heart gives us
strength and compassion
empathy a welcome plus
wearing it on my sleeve, fashion
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Seren
12 years 5 months ago
Hi Sue
I must be getting jaded and old I just didn't like the theme
I can't see a broken heart as a beautiful blessing
The rhyme felt forced I can't offer anything constructive
Maybe rewrite with less forced rhyme
Hugs Jc x
sueb
12 years 5 months ago
thanks jc for reading no
thanks jc for reading no problem have a great weekend x