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Feb 09, 2013
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Beside
To be beside the sea
mind and body in harmony
listening to the sea’s symphony
a water creature is me
feels like heaven ought to be
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Frenchf
12 years 5 months ago
I loved it but
felt it would benefit from removing the word "is"
a water creature, me
sueb
12 years 5 months ago
thanks a mil will remove
thanks a mil will remove cheers Sueb x