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sueb
sueb
Feb 12, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Chocolate Men

Men are like chocolates
some to soft, some to hard
some sweet and tasty
some dark and nasty
I’ve tried a few in my time
on some I wouldn’t spend a dime
I like the ones that melt in my mouth not in my hand
add a few nuts, yummm, that’s grand
men are like chocolates
some flavoursome, some not

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

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Comments

Rula

Rula

12 years 5 months ago

Line 2

too soft , too hard?

S

scribbler

12 years 5 months ago

Hi Sue

Are you saying a hard man is good to find?...................stan

F

Frenchf

12 years 5 months ago

Very nice

Do you need those too's in line 2
Some soft some hard

loved

loved

12 years 5 months ago

too hard ...too soft

chocolates just melt in the mouth
the tongue has to be sweet ...
it must have the force to slice
men's chocolates are hard too
if solid men have been seen by you..

sueb

sueb

12 years 5 months ago

Hi loved another poem in

Hi loved another poem in response they melt in the mouth not in the hand lol x thanks have a great day

sueb

sueb

12 years 5 months ago

xx

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