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Jahleel Drigo
Jahleel Drigo
Feb 12, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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Again the rainbow dances across the sky

Singing farewell to the old

Welcoming the new.

Colors of creation

Layers of emotion

Now they leap

Dancing until they die.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: VIR

Favorite Poets: “Withdraw into yourself and look. And if you do not find yourself beautiful yet, act as does the creator of a statue that is to be made beautiful: he cuts away here, he smoothes there, he makes this line lighter, this other purer, until a lovely face has grown upon his work. So do you also: cut away all that is excessive, straighten all that is crooked, bring light to all that is overcast, labour to make all one glow of beauty and never cease chiselling your statue, until there shall shine out on you from it the godlike splendour of virtue, until you shall see the perfect goodness surely established in the stainless shrine... Never did eye see the sun unless it had first become sunlike, and never can the soul have vision of the First Beauty unless itself be beautiful.”, Plotinus, The Enneads

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Frenchf

12 years 5 months ago

I loved the brevity

But didn't like new followed by new ,, dance followed by dance unless this was a theme of the poem and I missed it. Lovely idea of rainbow dancing across the sky

Jahleel Drigo

Jahleel Drigo

12 years 5 months ago

Much appreciated critique

Though Not much of a poet or a writer but it pleases me that these poems I muster up when i'm in the mood are appealing to readers like yourselves.

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 5 months ago

Jahleel

I notice that you say you are not so good at writing, but then on the other hand you put only 4 poems on since 2011.
This site will give you all the help you need there are people here that are the tops in poetic formats and are willing to help with your work.
So can we have a few more writes from you and then we can see where to go from there, also join the odd workshop we offer it is fun and no one not even me gets a bad report lol.
Take care out there, I have learned a little more Geography today..
Yours Ian.T