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Feb 15, 2013
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Witness
Alas, Winters black and bitter wine
Stains the chins of Dionysus children
His gaze pales the grapes upon the vine
Their frozen faces, witness, the chorus of oblivion
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Frenchf
12 years 5 months ago
Didn't like wine and vine
Didn't like wine and vine rhyme but otherwise interesting concept