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Irrational Man

she's lickably luscious
delectably plump
laced in skimp and lotions

my senses and notions
in mental commotion
floundering, reckless
in churning emotion

then,
that 'come-hither' look
the hook
the crook

and so I took
a ravenous
bite

god, I hope she's not poisonous

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 5 months ago

BL

Your actions aren't irrational sounds good to me but are you sure it's a girl.??????? Trying to figure out what else it could be lol. Good Write there, Yours Ian.T

brittle light

brittle light

12 years 5 months ago

I. T

Positively , absolutely sure she was all woman
the trepidation and Irrational aspect comes from
emotion overpowering rational thought;
Me, or any a man or woman, overwhelmed by sexual seduction
discounting concern for the consequences until after the fact!

a reckless game of Russian roulette these days, probably always was

be careful out there

Good to hear from you again. You are a major player on this site...keeping it active and engaging

thanks for all you do

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 5 months ago

Al

Sorry I didn't use your name, I had memory failure lol
Glad it was a woman you were writing about, now I will have to read it again lol The excitement when I thought you were talking about peaches.
Probably not her name lol.
Take care Al and thanks for your presence here also, Yours Ian.T

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Frenchf

12 years 5 months ago

I really liked this

deascription of your giving in to the moment and throwing caution to the winds and then wondering what you'd done

brittle light

brittle light

12 years 4 months ago

thanks

it is satisfying when a piece works in a utilitarian way, as well as artistcally.